My favourite
holiday was about three years ago, when I went to visit to my father and
brothers that live near to Pucon, so after a few days with my family, I went to
the national park Huerquehue, I knew this place before because I visit it with
my family a lot of times ago, and I like so much.
So that
time when I went to Huerquehue again, at least I climbed the hills, this stretch
is very beautiful because I was walked in a leafy native forest and by the path
there is a few of waterfall and I can saw the change of the vegetation across the path
while I was climbing the hill. Also I can saw when the forest is clearing, a
view of the lake caburgua and his surrounding area. When I was in the top of the hill, I swimming in
a very cool lake and after that I prepared the campsite for keep going the next
day to cross Huerquehue Park to arrive to río blanco hot spring. So the next
day I woke up early and started to walk, in this stretch the forest begin to be
more clearing until disappear completely and I was the experience of the transformation
of the forest to a high mountain landscape. After that I was descend to the Rio
Blanco hotspring and when I arrived I was very hungry and I think that I was eating
the best food of my life, I think this is because the hungry more than the
quality of the food, and after that I
prepared again the campsite and was sleep so much because the last trekking was
very hard, so when I was relaxed in the evening I went to swim to the hotspring
that is placed in a side of the river in the open, so you can relaxed in the
hotspring and see a lot of star in the night.
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Very good holiday. You just have to change some past tense verbs, nothing more ;)
Hello umami :P
I've never been there but many friends had told me that huerquehue's national park is outstanding.
You should change some simple and perfect past tense verb conjugations for a better understanding of your ideas.
have a nice day :)
Hi Mauricio! I can imagine how exciting your holidays were!
To improve your writing, I think you should put more attention on the past tense sentences :)
Regards!
Hi! I don´t know that place, but I´m glad that your best holiday was with your family and in Pucón!!
For me is one of the beautiest cities of Chile.
Regards!
Mauricio,
WC: 325. A bit too many.
Thanks for your narration, Huerquehue is such a beautiful place...
You need to revise the difference between Past Simple and Past Perfect:
… when I went to visit (to) my
… I (knew) HAD KNOWN this place before because I HAD visitED it with my family a (lot of times) LONG ago?, and I likeD IT so much.
It is important that you edit your text carefully before you publish it. Check these obs:
… I was walkING in a
…there (is) ARE a few (of) waterfalSl and the changeS (of) IN the vegetation across the path while I was climbing the hill. Also I I (can saw) COULD SEE when the forest (is) WAS clearing, a view of the lake caburgua and (his) ITS surrounding area. When I was( in ) AT the top of the hill, I (swimming) SWAM in a
… to arrive (to) AT río blanco hot springS BEGAN TO CLEAR MORE UNTIL IT DISAPPEARED COMPLETELY( begin to be more clearing until disappear completely) and I (was the) experienceD ( of) the transformation of the forest INto a high mountain landscape. After that I (was) descendED to
…because the (hungry) HUNGER WAS more than the quality of (the) food I HAD,
… and (was sleep) SLEPT so much
is placed (in a) ON THE side of the river in the open,
a lot of starS in the night.
Cheers,
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